I mean shit, I'm guessing you had a checklist of microaggressions to address, since you hit basically every single one. but it doesnt feel like a checklist at all, just the routine shit that happens when you see so many different groups of people on the reg. some that you shrug off and some that sticks in your craw forever. You packed a shitload of emotion into a fairly compact piece. That's not at all a criticism of the length, it's perfect for the story. You took just as much space as you needed, and each scene packs a major wallop. I struggle with length and taking forever to get my point across, so I really admire short stories and the thought that goes into making sure every word serves a purpose, especially when that purpose is figuratively using emotion to punc the reader in the face.
One missed opportunity was the wonderful misunderstandings you get when you're right in the middle of your parents' skin tones and people get edgy about an adult and a kid of different races walking around together. Even when both parents were present, I still got weird questions as a kid because people assumed my caucasian mother had adopted me from some war-torn south american country, while my paper-bag-test-passing latino father was my babysitter or possibly my kidnapper.
In closing, you rock. I love your attention to detail. Your style makes me feel more than any of the Hemingway I've read. You really captured the essence of playing Biracial Bingo every day. I could practically hear Elodie speaking your Elektra dialogue. Thanks for introducing me to Jesse Williams, he'd make a super cute Daredevil, I gotta try and draw him. Keep doing what you're doing, you're really onto something here and I wish you luck in all your future writing ventures. You're diamonds, baby
Re: [Mini-Fill] Matt/any, What if Matt were biracial/mixed?
I mean shit, I'm guessing you had a checklist of microaggressions to address, since you hit basically every single one. but it doesnt feel like a checklist at all, just the routine shit that happens when you see so many different groups of people on the reg. some that you shrug off and some that sticks in your craw forever.
You packed a shitload of emotion into a fairly compact piece. That's not at all a criticism of the length, it's perfect for the story. You took just as much space as you needed, and each scene packs a major wallop. I struggle with length and taking forever to get my point across, so I really admire short stories and the thought that goes into making sure every word serves a purpose, especially when that purpose is figuratively using emotion to punc the reader in the face.
One missed opportunity was the wonderful misunderstandings you get when you're right in the middle of your parents' skin tones and people get edgy about an adult and a kid of different races walking around together. Even when both parents were present, I still got weird questions as a kid because people assumed my caucasian mother had adopted me from some war-torn south american country, while my paper-bag-test-passing latino father was my babysitter or possibly my kidnapper.
In closing, you rock. I love your attention to detail. Your style makes me feel more than any of the Hemingway I've read. You really captured the essence of playing Biracial Bingo every day. I could practically hear Elodie speaking your Elektra dialogue. Thanks for introducing me to Jesse Williams, he'd make a super cute Daredevil, I gotta try and draw him. Keep doing what you're doing, you're really onto something here and I wish you luck in all your future writing ventures. You're diamonds, baby